Hi Aubryelle! I really love that you turned this into such a modern event by using the podcast as a telling source. It reminds me of Gossip Girl or even YouTube and Twitter! I also really love that, even though you modernized the scenarios at hand, you kept the original characters. I think this will allow you freedom with using today's lingo while still incorporating historically settings such as castles. I am excited to see where you take these stories. You did a great job of providing a brief overlook to, what I'm assuming, will be covered more in depth in your later stories. It reminds me of the preview for what's up next on the news.
Hi Aubryelle! Your storytelling approach, telling stories about the ladies of Camelot as a gossip show, is brilliant! It's very creative and unique, and it has a more contemporary feel. I can see many, many directions that you can go with these stories, and I'm excited to see what you do. I'm hoping that you go for a comedic element, as your introduction set you up very well for it. Your page was clean and appealing. It was well organized and served as a good backdrop for the story. I really like the pictures that you included. They do a lot to help create a nice mental picture of who they are as people. There were a few minor editing things that I noticed while I was reading. For instance, this sentence early in the introduction: "we have confirmed from reliable sources from within court". The from repetition throws your sentence off a bit. You could tighten it a little to something like: we have confirmed from reliable sources within the court. The story itself flowed wonderfully and felt really fun. Good job!
Aubryelle, I really enjoyed your project. I like the way you are using a podcast for gossip to explain the stories of the women from the Round Table. Does the gossip girl have a code name or anything? It reminded me of the older TV series “Gossip Girl”. The rest of the stories I am sure will be just as juicy and we can learn who is the baby daddy of Elaine the Fair. One issue was my confusion with who the other characters in the project were. I am familiar with Guinevere and King Arthur’s story but I do not really know who the other women are. It would be helpful to add some author’s notes to the end of the introduction explaining who each of the women are compared to King Arthur and Queen Guinevere. The author’s notes for the first story of Arthur and Guinevere love were perfect Overall, I love the direction of your project and cannot wait to read the other stories to come.
Aubryelle, I just read your Introduction and first Storybook story. I think the way you decided to present your topic is a great way to bring these ancient tales into the present day. While we may not know much about the ladies of Camelot, we have at least heard their names. Now, we get to learn about them in a gossipy way, which we are all used to in today's media. In the Story of Arthur and Guinevere, I would definitely format this a different way. One option would be to separate this one big chunk into paragraphs. I would break down the author's note, too, as it's very long. However, I think a better way to format these stories would be to actually write them in an interview form. There is no dialogue except from the radio presenter in this story. As it's a radio interview, it would make the most sense to have this be a question and answer type thing. For example: Interviewer: "So, Guinevere, how did you fall for King Arthur, anyway?" Guinevere: "Well, you see, I was originally drawn to him because of his good looks!" Something like this would flow very well for a radio interview. Also, I would go back through this to edit some grammatical and punctuation mistakes. Good job on this.
Hey Aubryelle! Just read your introduction and your first story. I love how your doing a podcast theme to tell your stories. It's very nice to see another person doing their own King Arthur stories and I love how your talking about the women of the legend. I also am intrigued by Arthur being okay with the affair between Lancelot and Guinivere, seeing as how originally that was a key factor in the fall of camelot, it was a really nice change of pace and leaves me wanting to read more stories especially about Morgan Le Fay. I'll definitely stop by to read more of your story each week even if I'm not gonna comment for credit, I'm just so intrigued by your story well done.
Hi Aurbryelle! I just read your introduction and story that you have in the works for your story book collection. Your set up of your site is really nice and I think how clean and organized it is really adds to the reading of your work instead of just being distracting. Something that might be helpful to readers is to clean up the dialogue somehow. It was hard to follow at points as far as what was going on. Maybe it could be more of an interview type set up so that the readers know exactly who's thoughts they are reading. Right now, the script style was a little confusing for me, but that final decision is of course up to you. Overall, I really enjoyed the story itself and I will definitely be back to read more at some point! Good work!
Hi Aubryelle! First of all, I really love the concept for your storybook — I think podcasts are amazing and your subject matter is so fitting for that medium. I love how your intro really lays out everything that's happening in the kingdom and all the relationship dynamics. One thing I noticed there was that some of the language you use sounds a bit formal. Maybe if you added in some conjunctions (for example, instead of "The King cannot seem to catch a break," maybe "the King can't seem to catch a break") it could make things more casual and conversational. Also, I think it'd be nice to let readers know in the intro who the podcast narrator is. Maybe you could have them sign off the show with some signature catch phrase and their name? And I love your interview-style setup in the first story. One thing I found myself wanting was more emotional reaction from King Arthur. How does he feel about his wife's philandering and what's he going to do about it? Overall though, I really enjoyed your creative and detailed storybook — really great work!
I love this concept of a podcast that you used for your stories! I think its so clever. I think your introduction did a good job of setting up your stories and how they will intertwine. My only issue was that there seemed to be 4 distinct paragraphs: Lancelot and Guinevere, Morgan LeFay, Elaine the Fair, and the Lady of Shalott, but then only 3 pictures. So will Elaine the Fair get her own story or will she be folded into one of the other stories?
As for your first story, I really liked it! I thought it was interesting to have the perspectives of both Arthur and Guinevere, and I thought it was so funny that their stories didn’t quite match up. I agree that including Guinevere’s perspective adds to the love triangle, and I like that you brought that in to make her more important to the story.
Hey Aubryelle! You could not have chosen a more well known source than the story of King Arthur and the knights of the round table, or at least you could not have found one more commonly mistold. I like the fresh apraoch you take with it focussing on the ladies. Your introduction does a great job of making me feel like I'm reading about a soap opera of some kind. Your introduction also did a great job of briefly introducing us the the main players of each chapter of the story.
Reading your stories I love how you decided to do the whole blog in a radio format, it is something I for one have never seen before and I think it works great to convey the gossipy nature of all your stories. I think allowing the main characters to interact with a third party rather than each other allows for some more personal opinions from each of the characters, something we couldn't get from the original story.
Hey, Aubryelle! I read your Storybook a couple of weeks ago, and I mentioned writing in radio-interview style. Since you've done this, everything seems to flow so much more nicely! In your first story, I thought it was so interesting to interview King Arthur who is kind of acting as this awkward third wheel, now. It is clear that he still loves Guinevere, but he is trying to be calm about his wife loving someone else. I also thought that it was admirable that Guinevere does not want to hurt Arthur, but since she is going around proclaiming her love of Sir Lancelot, it is clear that she is still a young, silly character. I think this is the appropriate tone! It was also interesting for the "listener" that you chose to interview Morgan le Fay, so now this love triangle (?) is a family affair! The only suggestion I have to make is to go back through and correct a few grammar mistakes. For example, in the first story, "It('s) nice to be here today..." And the second, "Let(')s welcome Morgan le Fay." Good job on this!
Aubryelle, I was really excited when your Storybook came up on the randomizer. I love the stories of Camelot, and Morgan Le Fay is one of my favorite literary characters of all time. The way that you are telling each woman’s story is interesting and gives the readers a different look into the characterization of each woman, simply because we’re getting their stories in a modern way through what we are reading to be their own words. While I know that you’re writing in interview-style, it would be best to go back and make note on some grammatical mistakes. Not only that, but make sure that you’re writing in a way that makes sense if you were to say it aloud. Sometimes writing dialogue down is hard because we make it more formal than what it would sound like if someone was actually saying it. Other than that, you’re doing a really good job and I can’t wait to read more from you!
I was scrolling through the list of projects and I saw yours and remembered how much I liked your first story, so I thought I would check back in and read your second one! I think you did a really great job with this story too. I was wondering at the beginning how it was that Morgan got out of prison. Was there a sentence she was serving, or did Arthur change his mind? I like that you changed it so that she seemed like she could be innocent, because I think that lets the reader really get into the story and form their own opinions on who was guilty. It plays off like a lot of stories we hear in the media, especially with the podcast format. You did a great job with this interpretation and I am excited to read your last story in this series!
This is a really nice and interesting way to approach these stories. I only know a little about Arthurian legends, and what I do know is based off a TV show and a little Wikipedia. I like how you included Guinevere’s perspective in this first story. It adds a layer of depth to the whole ‘love triangle’ situation. It also, like you mentioned in the Author’s Note, helped understand Guinevere’s motives for her action. The story is well written and in a creative manner. I really enjoyed ad laughed at the beginning of the second interview at the dungeon part, it was a great way to start the story. In the second story, Morgana’s perspective was included and highlighted and I think that that was a great idea. You’re not only retelling these stories in another way, you’re also adding to the story itself. Research must be hard due to there being a number of variations and some unknowns, I wish you luck on any further research. Keep up the good work, this was a great storybook.
I have to start by saying that I think your introduction and home page look great! I think the fact that you were able to use relevant background images really makes it look professional. I liked the image in your introduction a lot and it really makes it seem like I am part of a radio show. The first story also looks very great visually. I also really liked how you included interviews from both parties here. I knew Arthur was madly in love with his wife. But, it was very interesting to see the opposing dynamic. I like how included in the interview Guinevere's feelings. She obviously does not love him like he does her. It is a bit tragic honestly. I think the second story is hilarious. I like how you included the crimes of Morgan and then proceeded to interview her. I wonder if Arthur will come forward and say something about Morgan? I feel that there is more to the story.
Came back for more of your stories. just read your most recent Morgan Le Fey story. I really like the background on why she hates Arthur. I've never really thought about Morgan having a love interest. It's quite interesting that they grew up together in your version too. What is the story about why they had different mothers? Was it an affair? The loss of a wife with a new one? Would love to come back again to read more.
I really enjoyed reading your storybook. I have always been fascinated by arthurian legends, and you did a fantastic job of bringing them to life in a modern and fresh way. I liked that in the two stories you have up you focused on providing perspectives that the original stories left out. I think it adds to the readers enjoyment of the original stories and allows you to create original content. I would note that there is a formatting issue with your picture in the Arthur and Guinevere story. The image is cut off to where you can only see the middle of it. I only noticed it because the issue did not recur in the morgan le fay story. I'm not technologically savvy enough to tell you how to fix it though since I don't even have cover photos on my project. Overall great job! I really enjoyed reading your stories.
Hey Aubryelle. First of all, I would like to start off by saying that I really love the color scheme of your storybook. I think it looks really good. I also really love how you made the stories into a series of podcasts. I am from the other class and even though I have read about King Arthur and his Knights of the Round Table it has been a really long time since I did. So your author’s notes were really helpful in reminding me of the original stories. My personal favorite has to be the second one because I think that it is interesting to see things from Morgan’s point of view instead of King Arthur’s. I also like how it shows this kind of dark side to Arthur. It is interesting to see him as being the person who is in the wrong. I also like how in the first story you chose to include Guinevere’s feeling in all this because no one ever does that so it is nice to see it for once. I really like your story and I look forward to reading more of them. Have a good rest of the semester.
First off, I chose to click on your project because of your title. I was intrigued by your choice to write stories about the women of Camelot, and your interview-style stories definitely did not disappoint! The color-scheme of your comment was is also very interesting; the paint strokes work really well with the artwork of the characters in your project! I love reading medieval stories, and Camelot is actually one of my favorite musicals! I loved the structure of your stories: it was easy to follow because of the interview style, and I felt like I really was speaking to the main characters! The only thing I might add to your stories is more background. Before an interview, people usually give a small introduction about the characters, so I felt like that would make your project even better! Great job!
Hi Aubryelle! I stumbled upon your storybook because of my interests in King Arthur and the whole Camelot story line. I must say that I made the right choice picking yours to read. My attention was grabbed the moment I read the introduction. The way you told your story in a podcast/interview like way made it very easy to read and follow along. It made me feel like I was listening to the radio or even watching a gossip reality show. To be honest, I had no prior knowledge about Lancelot and Guinevere or even Morgan Le Fay, so reading about them made it much more interesting. I'm always up to learn new things. You did a great job in your author's note to inform the reading about the little or big changes you made to the original story line such as adding a characters emotions and thoughts on a certain event. It really let the reader connect to these characters and understand where they're coming from.
Hello Aubryelle! I love the idea of doing a podcast for your story! It is very different from what you imagine when thinking about Camelot. Having the entire story be dialog is very refreshing. King Arthur does not seem upset at all about this affair. Hearing the two sides to the story with Arthur and Guinevere is very interesting. It certainly makes her attraction to Lancelot more believable. Morgan Le Fay's testimony was very interesting. She certainly tried to paint herself in the best light. One thing that I am wondering is why she was released from the dungeon? It does not sound like she is remorseful, or has altered her plans to kill Arthur. Overall, your story is amazing. I felt like I got to know the characters very well. Good job!
Hi Aubryelle! I really loved getting to read your project! I absolutely love that you decided to to Arthurian tales but with your own twist - I think the cool thing about picking this is that it allows you to play with the story because we all already know the original one. I really love that you decided to do a sort of podcast to tell your story, that's so relevant because so many of us listen to this kind of thing on our podcasts. My only suggestion here would be to maybe make the language a little less casual? Podcasts tend to be pretty laid back affairs so it may make more sense if your word choice reflected that. That being said I think the real strength of your story is the way you have humanized all of the characters. It's easy to hate Guinevere and find her behavior unforgivable (at least for me) but I feel like giving her side of the story really made her seem relatable and changed my attitude toward her! Even though a lot was changed with Morgan Le Fay I liked that better - I think she is way more relatable this way which allows you to be drawn into the story! Great job!
Hi Aubryelle!
ReplyDeleteI really love that you turned this into such a modern event by using the podcast as a telling source. It reminds me of Gossip Girl or even YouTube and Twitter!
I also really love that, even though you modernized the scenarios at hand, you kept the original characters. I think this will allow you freedom with using today's lingo while still incorporating historically settings such as castles.
I am excited to see where you take these stories. You did a great job of providing a brief overlook to, what I'm assuming, will be covered more in depth in your later stories. It reminds me of the preview for what's up next on the news.
Great job!
Hi Aubryelle!
ReplyDeleteYour storytelling approach, telling stories about the ladies of Camelot as a gossip show, is brilliant! It's very creative and unique, and it has a more contemporary feel. I can see many, many directions that you can go with these stories, and I'm excited to see what you do. I'm hoping that you go for a comedic element, as your introduction set you up very well for it. Your page was clean and appealing. It was well organized and served as a good backdrop for the story. I really like the pictures that you included. They do a lot to help create a nice mental picture of who they are as people. There were a few minor editing things that I noticed while I was reading. For instance, this sentence early in the introduction: "we have confirmed from reliable sources from within court". The from repetition throws your sentence off a bit. You could tighten it a little to something like: we have confirmed from reliable sources within the court. The story itself flowed wonderfully and felt really fun. Good job!
Aubryelle, I really enjoyed your project. I like the way you are using a podcast for gossip to explain the stories of the women from the Round Table. Does the gossip girl have a code name or anything? It reminded me of the older TV series “Gossip Girl”. The rest of the stories I am sure will be just as juicy and we can learn who is the baby daddy of Elaine the Fair. One issue was my confusion with who the other characters in the project were. I am familiar with Guinevere and King Arthur’s story but I do not really know who the other women are. It would be helpful to add some author’s notes to the end of the introduction explaining who each of the women are compared to King Arthur and Queen Guinevere. The author’s notes for the first story of Arthur and Guinevere love were perfect Overall, I love the direction of your project and cannot wait to read the other stories to come.
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ReplyDeleteAubryelle, I just read your Introduction and first Storybook story. I think the way you decided to present your topic is a great way to bring these ancient tales into the present day. While we may not know much about the ladies of Camelot, we have at least heard their names. Now, we get to learn about them in a gossipy way, which we are all used to in today's media. In the Story of Arthur and Guinevere, I would definitely format this a different way. One option would be to separate this one big chunk into paragraphs. I would break down the author's note, too, as it's very long. However, I think a better way to format these stories would be to actually write them in an interview form. There is no dialogue except from the radio presenter in this story. As it's a radio interview, it would make the most sense to have this be a question and answer type thing. For example:
ReplyDeleteInterviewer: "So, Guinevere, how did you fall for King Arthur, anyway?"
Guinevere: "Well, you see, I was originally drawn to him because of his good looks!"
Something like this would flow very well for a radio interview. Also, I would go back through this to edit some grammatical and punctuation mistakes.
Good job on this.
Hey Aubryelle! Just read your introduction and your first story. I love how your doing a podcast theme to tell your stories. It's very nice to see another person doing their own King Arthur stories and I love how your talking about the women of the legend. I also am intrigued by Arthur being okay with the affair between Lancelot and Guinivere, seeing as how originally that was a key factor in the fall of camelot, it was a really nice change of pace and leaves me wanting to read more stories especially about Morgan Le Fay. I'll definitely stop by to read more of your story each week even if I'm not gonna comment for credit, I'm just so intrigued by your story well done.
ReplyDeleteHi Aurbryelle! I just read your introduction and story that you have in the works for your story book collection. Your set up of your site is really nice and I think how clean and organized it is really adds to the reading of your work instead of just being distracting. Something that might be helpful to readers is to clean up the dialogue somehow. It was hard to follow at points as far as what was going on. Maybe it could be more of an interview type set up so that the readers know exactly who's thoughts they are reading. Right now, the script style was a little confusing for me, but that final decision is of course up to you. Overall, I really enjoyed the story itself and I will definitely be back to read more at some point! Good work!
ReplyDeleteHi Aubryelle! First of all, I really love the concept for your storybook — I think podcasts are amazing and your subject matter is so fitting for that medium. I love how your intro really lays out everything that's happening in the kingdom and all the relationship dynamics. One thing I noticed there was that some of the language you use sounds a bit formal. Maybe if you added in some conjunctions (for example, instead of "The King cannot seem to catch a break," maybe "the King can't seem to catch a break") it could make things more casual and conversational. Also, I think it'd be nice to let readers know in the intro who the podcast narrator is. Maybe you could have them sign off the show with some signature catch phrase and their name? And I love your interview-style setup in the first story. One thing I found myself wanting was more emotional reaction from King Arthur. How does he feel about his wife's philandering and what's he going to do about it? Overall though, I really enjoyed your creative and detailed storybook — really great work!
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ReplyDeleteI love this concept of a podcast that you used for your stories! I think its so clever. I think your introduction did a good job of setting up your stories and how they will intertwine. My only issue was that there seemed to be 4 distinct paragraphs: Lancelot and Guinevere, Morgan LeFay, Elaine the Fair, and the Lady of Shalott, but then only 3 pictures. So will Elaine the Fair get her own story or will she be folded into one of the other stories?
As for your first story, I really liked it! I thought it was interesting to have the perspectives of both Arthur and Guinevere, and I thought it was so funny that their stories didn’t quite match up. I agree that including Guinevere’s perspective adds to the love triangle, and I like that you brought that in to make her more important to the story.
Hey Aubryelle!
ReplyDeleteYou could not have chosen a more well known source than the story of King Arthur and the knights of the round table, or at least you could not have found one more commonly mistold. I like the fresh apraoch you take with it focussing on the ladies. Your introduction does a great job of making me feel like I'm reading about a soap opera of some kind. Your introduction also did a great job of briefly introducing us the the main players of each chapter of the story.
Reading your stories I love how you decided to do the whole blog in a radio format, it is something I for one have never seen before and I think it works great to convey the gossipy nature of all your stories. I think allowing the main characters to interact with a third party rather than each other allows for some more personal opinions from each of the characters, something we couldn't get from the original story.
Hey, Aubryelle! I read your Storybook a couple of weeks ago, and I mentioned writing in radio-interview style. Since you've done this, everything seems to flow so much more nicely! In your first story, I thought it was so interesting to interview King Arthur who is kind of acting as this awkward third wheel, now. It is clear that he still loves Guinevere, but he is trying to be calm about his wife loving someone else. I also thought that it was admirable that Guinevere does not want to hurt Arthur, but since she is going around proclaiming her love of Sir Lancelot, it is clear that she is still a young, silly character. I think this is the appropriate tone! It was also interesting for the "listener" that you chose to interview Morgan le Fay, so now this love triangle (?) is a family affair! The only suggestion I have to make is to go back through and correct a few grammar mistakes. For example, in the first story, "It('s) nice to be here today..." And the second, "Let(')s welcome Morgan le Fay." Good job on this!
ReplyDeleteAubryelle,
ReplyDeleteI was really excited when your Storybook came up on the randomizer. I love the stories of Camelot, and Morgan Le Fay is one of my favorite literary characters of all time. The way that you are telling each woman’s story is interesting and gives the readers a different look into the characterization of each woman, simply because we’re getting their stories in a modern way through what we are reading to be their own words. While I know that you’re writing in interview-style, it would be best to go back and make note on some grammatical mistakes. Not only that, but make sure that you’re writing in a way that makes sense if you were to say it aloud. Sometimes writing dialogue down is hard because we make it more formal than what it would sound like if someone was actually saying it. Other than that, you’re doing a really good job and I can’t wait to read more from you!
Hi Aubryelle!
ReplyDeleteI was scrolling through the list of projects and I saw yours and remembered how much I liked your first story, so I thought I would check back in and read your second one! I think you did a really great job with this story too. I was wondering at the beginning how it was that Morgan got out of prison. Was there a sentence she was serving, or did Arthur change his mind? I like that you changed it so that she seemed like she could be innocent, because I think that lets the reader really get into the story and form their own opinions on who was guilty. It plays off like a lot of stories we hear in the media, especially with the podcast format. You did a great job with this interpretation and I am excited to read your last story in this series!
This is a really nice and interesting way to approach these stories. I only know a little about Arthurian legends, and what I do know is based off a TV show and a little Wikipedia. I like how you included Guinevere’s perspective in this first story. It adds a layer of depth to the whole ‘love triangle’ situation. It also, like you mentioned in the Author’s Note, helped understand Guinevere’s motives for her action. The story is well written and in a creative manner. I really enjoyed ad laughed at the beginning of the second interview at the dungeon part, it was a great way to start the story. In the second story, Morgana’s perspective was included and highlighted and I think that that was a great idea. You’re not only retelling these stories in another way, you’re also adding to the story itself. Research must be hard due to there being a number of variations and some unknowns, I wish you luck on any further research. Keep up the good work, this was a great storybook.
ReplyDeleteHey there, Aubryelle!
ReplyDeleteI have to start by saying that I think your introduction and home page look great! I think the fact that you were able to use relevant background images really makes it look professional. I liked the image in your introduction a lot and it really makes it seem like I am part of a radio show. The first story also looks very great visually. I also really liked how you included interviews from both parties here. I knew Arthur was madly in love with his wife. But, it was very interesting to see the opposing dynamic. I like how included in the interview Guinevere's feelings. She obviously does not love him like he does her. It is a bit tragic honestly. I think the second story is hilarious. I like how you included the crimes of Morgan and then proceeded to interview her. I wonder if Arthur will come forward and say something about Morgan? I feel that there is more to the story.
Hello again Aubryelle.
ReplyDeleteCame back for more of your stories. just read your most recent Morgan Le Fey story. I really like the background on why she hates Arthur. I've never really thought about Morgan having a love interest. It's quite interesting that they grew up together in your version too. What is the story about why they had different mothers? Was it an affair? The loss of a wife with a new one? Would love to come back again to read more.
Hi Aubreyelle!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your storybook. I have always been fascinated by arthurian legends, and you did a fantastic job of bringing them to life in a modern and fresh way. I liked that in the two stories you have up you focused on providing perspectives that the original stories left out. I think it adds to the readers enjoyment of the original stories and allows you to create original content. I would note that there is a formatting issue with your picture in the Arthur and Guinevere story. The image is cut off to where you can only see the middle of it. I only noticed it because the issue did not recur in the morgan le fay story. I'm not technologically savvy enough to tell you how to fix it though since I don't even have cover photos on my project. Overall great job! I really enjoyed reading your stories.
-Elizabeth
Hey Aubryelle.
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, I would like to start off by saying that I really love the color scheme of your storybook. I think it looks really good. I also really love how you made the stories into a series of podcasts. I am from the other class and even though I have read about King Arthur and his Knights of the Round Table it has been a really long time since I did. So your author’s notes were really helpful in reminding me of the original stories. My personal favorite has to be the second one because I think that it is interesting to see things from Morgan’s point of view instead of King Arthur’s. I also like how it shows this kind of dark side to Arthur. It is interesting to see him as being the person who is in the wrong. I also like how in the first story you chose to include Guinevere’s feeling in all this because no one ever does that so it is nice to see it for once. I really like your story and I look forward to reading more of them. Have a good rest of the semester.
Abryelle,
ReplyDeleteFirst off, I chose to click on your project because of your title. I was intrigued by your choice to write stories about the women of Camelot, and your interview-style stories definitely did not disappoint! The color-scheme of your comment was is also very interesting; the paint strokes work really well with the artwork of the characters in your project! I love reading medieval stories, and Camelot is actually one of my favorite musicals! I loved the structure of your stories: it was easy to follow because of the interview style, and I felt like I really was speaking to the main characters! The only thing I might add to your stories is more background. Before an interview, people usually give a small introduction about the characters, so I felt like that would make your project even better! Great job!
Hi Aubryelle!
ReplyDeleteI stumbled upon your storybook because of my interests in King Arthur and the whole Camelot story line. I must say that I made the right choice picking yours to read. My attention was grabbed the moment I read the introduction. The way you told your story in a podcast/interview like way made it very easy to read and follow along. It made me feel like I was listening to the radio or even watching a gossip reality show. To be honest, I had no prior knowledge about Lancelot and Guinevere or even Morgan Le Fay, so reading about them made it much more interesting. I'm always up to learn new things. You did a great job in your author's note to inform the reading about the little or big changes you made to the original story line such as adding a characters emotions and thoughts on a certain event. It really let the reader connect to these characters and understand where they're coming from.
Hello Aubryelle!
ReplyDeleteI love the idea of doing a podcast for your story! It is very different from what you imagine when thinking about Camelot. Having the entire story be dialog is very refreshing. King Arthur does not seem upset at all about this affair. Hearing the two sides to the story with Arthur and Guinevere is very interesting. It certainly makes her attraction to Lancelot more believable. Morgan Le Fay's testimony was very interesting. She certainly tried to paint herself in the best light. One thing that I am wondering is why she was released from the dungeon? It does not sound like she is remorseful, or has altered her plans to kill Arthur. Overall, your story is amazing. I felt like I got to know the characters very well. Good job!
Hi Aubryelle! I really loved getting to read your project! I absolutely love that you decided to to Arthurian tales but with your own twist - I think the cool thing about picking this is that it allows you to play with the story because we all already know the original one. I really love that you decided to do a sort of podcast to tell your story, that's so relevant because so many of us listen to this kind of thing on our podcasts. My only suggestion here would be to maybe make the language a little less casual? Podcasts tend to be pretty laid back affairs so it may make more sense if your word choice reflected that. That being said I think the real strength of your story is the way you have humanized all of the characters. It's easy to hate Guinevere and find her behavior unforgivable (at least for me) but I feel like giving her side of the story really made her seem relatable and changed my attitude toward her! Even though a lot was changed with Morgan Le Fay I liked that better - I think she is way more relatable this way which allows you to be drawn into the story! Great job!
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